When my first and excellent editor, Alix Reid, would edit my manuscripts, she used to sprinkle the word flat here and there – at random, it seemed to me. Flat was the edit I most hated to see. What\u2019s wrong with this? I always thought and never asked. I just tried to make the flat words plumper, rounder, better. Whatever I\u2019d written usually did get better, just because if you pay close attention to anything, you can improve it.<\/p>\n
Now that Alix has left New York publishing, I think I finally know what she meant. A sentence like I\u2019m scared. might warrant a flat. I\u2019m scared is a summary statement, not specific, not very interesting. The reader might reasonably want to know how this particular character is scared\u2013<\/p>\n
which I find hard to express in an un-flat, original way. The other day I needed to describe a character exhibiting fear. He isn\u2019t my POV character, so I had no access to his thoughts. I hunted for new ways to show fright by googling images of “frightened person.\u201d My sad discovery was that we all look a lot alike when we\u2019re scared. These are the symptoms I saw: mouth open in a scream or partially open with the lips curving down, curled hands near the neck or mouth, a lot of whites of the eyes, raised eyebrows. Then I googled \u201cfear response,\u201d not in images, but on the web, and read about fear. We all look much alike when we\u2019re afraid, because the same processes are going on in the brains of all of us. The article didn\u2019t mention the brains of trained assassins or the insane, just normal people\u2019s. When terror strikes, the thalamus, the hypothalamus, the sensory cortex, the amygdala, and the hippocampus get into the act. Blood rushes away from our skin (so we pale) to the muscles that can fight or carry us away. Our hearts speed up, likewise our blood pressure. This inner brouhaha causes the images I saw.<\/p>\n
Weirdly, as I learned about fear, my heart started racing.<\/p>\n
In just about every book I\u2019ve written my main character\u2019s heart has pounded once or twice. I never want to write the cliche, but I do like to terrify my characters. After scaring them a few times and writing more interesting reactions, my ingenuity runs out, and, their hearts pound. In the case of the character I mentioned before, however, since he\u2019s not the POV character, I can\u2019t even pound his heart, because I can\u2019t tell from the outside what his heart is doing. I don’t have to be inside him for him to speak or scream. If he did, maybe something un-flat would come out, but he\u2019s a stoic, silent sort. Very difficult.<\/p>\n
It’s easier with a POV character because we do have his thoughts to work with, although in a panicky moment he doesn\u2019t have much time to think. A lengthy rumination would slow the action and drain away the tension. But a short, surprising thought is great, if you or I or he can come up with one.<\/p>\n
In my books about the fairies of Never Land, I have extra options. The fairies are surrounded by a halo of light – their glows – and they have wings. This is wonderful – wings flutter or freeze; a fairy drops suddenly; the glows change color or dim or flicker or go out or flare up. If only people had glows and wings or even reacted idiosyncratically: one person\u2019s hair turning purple, another\u2019s ears spinning, somebody else\u2019s chin lengthening – temporary responses or permanent evidence. But these fascinating changes are beyond us. So what else is there?<\/p>\n
One of my early jobs after college took me into unsafe neighborhoods in New York City, long before cell phones were invented. It was a job I loved, and I felt scared only when the streets were deserted. What I did then was to talk aloud to myself like a lunatic. I don\u2019t remember my words, nothing useful, no teleporting spells. I haven\u2019t put this fear technique of mine in a book. The right moment hasn\u2019t come, but my compulsive speech is worth remembering.<\/p>\n
You might find it useful to recall your own scary experiences and what you said and thought and did and felt. You could ask other people about their frightening memories and write the answers down. You can build up a stockpile of these and never go flat when your character is afraid. I think I\u2019m going to do that. Have fun!<\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"
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