On July 26, 2011, Emma wrote, …I\u2019m wondering how much, um, delving is necessary? That may not be the right word, but (this is the only example I can think of right this second) on Food Network Star, the judges are always telling the Food Network wannabees to show the viewers more personality and more of their background. They say they can\u2019t get enough of it when they learn more about each hopeful and, well, do you think our readers are the same way about our characters? Or would they be fine if we just went through the series of actions without bothering to really do some soul searching? This sort of seems like a rambling post, but it\u2019s the only way I can think of to put it. If you can decipher what I\u2019m trying to say, do you have any advice?<\/i><\/p>\n
Emma, you\u2019re completely clear. Alas, as usual when it comes to writing, there\u2019s no conclusive answer. For starters, reader taste varies. In the old movie, My Dinner With Andre<\/i> (for adults), two characters spend an evening in conversation, and personality is revealed by chat. I could barely sit through it. I wanted to scream at the actors (in the movie theater), \u201cStand up and do something!\u201d But the film is beloved by many and has become a classic. Same with books: opinions differ. If you concentrate on your characters\u2019 thoughts and feelings and revelations of backstory, some readers will be delighted, others impatient. You can\u2019t please everyone.<\/p>\n
So you might as well please yourself. (You can repeat this phrase to yourself often: You might as well please yourself<\/i>. Hang it over your work space, write it in your notebooks in bubble writing or calligraphy, because it applies to just about every aspect of writing.)<\/p>\n
Think about what you enjoy. Do you like to elaborate on your characters\u2019 thoughts? Do you revel in soul-searching dialogue? If you\u2019re fascinated, many readers are likely to be, too. And you can field test what you\u2019re doing when you show your work to a friend or to your critique group. If they tell you to dial it back, if you hear from more than one reader that it\u2019s too much, then you can start cutting. This tends to be my way. I put in too much introspection that I have to trim in revision.<\/p>\n
If you prefer to write action-action-action, indulge yourself and see what your critique buddies say. If they tell you your characters\u2019 activities seem motiveless, then you need to build in more thought, feeling, dialogue, and maybe backstory.<\/p>\n
The decision also depends on the character you\u2019re working with. If Inga is not introspective, she won\u2019t be doing much deep rumination on the page no matter how much you want her to. You\u2019ll be stuck with her actions, her limited thinking, what other characters say to her about herself and what they say about her when she\u2019s not there. However, if Inga revels in exploring her feelings and her reasoning, then you need to give the reader at least a taste of this or more than a taste if you like.<\/p>\n
Genre also influences how much \u201cdelving\u201d you do. An adventure story, for example, is likely to be action-oriented. Thoughts, feelings, backstory may be introduced, but the story won\u2019t linger on them. Terrific examples of action novels are the books by Richard Stark (high school and above), pseudonym of the late Donald Westlake. I haven\u2019t read one in years, but I used to inhale them in one long gasp.<\/p>\n
As soon as I wrote the paragraph about adventure stories I thought of Hamlet<\/i>, which I\u2019d call an action play since it has a ghost, suicide, and murder all going on. But it\u2019s also supremely introspective because Hamlet deliberates and vacillates constantly on his proper course of action. Like Shakespeare, you can do both, write an action story that\u2019s rich in thought and feeling or a character-driven tale full of excitement.<\/p>\n
In stories, character is everything or almost everything. A pile-up of events won\u2019t draw a reader in (taste doesn\u2019t vary on this, I don\u2019t think) if the reader doesn\u2019t know who the players are. These characters don\u2019t necessarily need to be sympathetic, but they have to be understandable, which probably calls for some indication of thought and feeling.<\/p>\n
And action is a tool of character development. In A Tale of Two Castles<\/i> the ogre, Count Jonty Um, isn\u2019t the POV character, so we don\u2019t experience his inner life and he doesn\u2019t say much. The reader gets to know him mostly through his actions, his generosity, for example. He buys a humongous meal full of rich delicacies for Elodie, the POV character, who only once before tasted an expensive treat – because it had fallen on the ground and been partially stepped on.<\/p>\n
Real people express themselves through action. We say something about ourselves every second: the way we eat, what we do in our spare time, how we get ready to leave the house, our little rituals. Many of these acts are so ingrained we perform them without thought, certainly without being conscious that we\u2019re every second making a personality declaration. I would even argue that these characteristic actions say more about us than even our thoughts and feelings, which are fleeting.<\/p>\n
I\u2019ve never watched The Food Network. Maybe there isn\u2019t scope there for revelation through action. Maybe it all comes through telling, by participants talking about themselves. If that\u2019s the case, what a limitation! No wonder they encourage the soul searching. But maybe I\u2019m way off base. Sorry, Food Network!<\/p>\n
Here come three prompts: <\/p>\n
\u2219 Lately I\u2019ve been reading health and science articles about people in hospitals in what they call a \u201cvegetative state,\u201d and now there\u2019s starting to be evidence that some of them, who can\u2019t speak or move, can think and are thinking and have an emotional life. Scary! So your character, Irene, is in a coma. She can hear and think. Write a story about her. You can include the sounds she hears from the activity around her. Unaware of her alertness, people may say things they would keep to themselves if they thought someone was listening.<\/p>\n
\u2219 Ira is studying to be a mime. His teacher tells him and the other students in his class that they aren\u2019t allowed to speak for a week. Write about part of that week or the whole week. Oh, and you can\u2019t write in first person, and you have no access to Ira\u2019s thoughts, only his actions. Give him something important that he has to communicate.<\/p>\n
\u2219 Character X is chasing Character Y through a shopping mall. Don\u2019t give them names or thoughts or feelings and very limited speech, but put in lots of close calls and narrow escapes. Don’t even decide which is the hero and which the villain. See what happens.<\/p>\n
Have fun, and save what you write!<\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"
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